"Lyo****" <iridix@[EMAIL PROTECTED]
> wrote in message
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> Hello. I looking for native english speakers and asking for help...
> I'm not native english speaker, but I want to make my game text as
> smooth as possible (well perceived). Please help me.
>
> How to play:
> Open doors to move forward through maze
Open doors to move forward through the maze
> Collect golden keys
Correct
> One key opens one door
Correct
> Choose your way carefully,
Correct
> If you haven't enough keys, you become lost in the maze
If you haven't enough keys, you may become lost in the maze.
If you don't have enough keys, you will become lost in the maze.
If you don'e have enough keys, youmay become lost in the maze.
> If you lost, you may try level again.
If you become lost, you may try the level again.
If you lose, you may try the level again.
If you become stuck, you may try the level again.
> Select in-game menu and choose 'Try again'
Correct
> Try another path.
Correct.
Perhaps those 2 should become
Select in-game menu and choose 'Try again' and try another path.
> Good luck!
>
> Congratulations!
> You have completed the game!
Correct
> ..Brave Dany saved the princess and returned her to the magic land
Correct. Although Danny is a more English spelling
> Gwerk was exiled to the far, far mountains...
Correct
> Milena with Dany married, and live long in hapiness..
Milena and Dany marriend and lived happily ever after.
> But that's is not end of our story!
Correct
>
> Play the sequel of Dany adventures!
Play the squel to Dany Adventures!
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